substitute: (alien angry)
substitute ([personal profile] substitute) wrote2003-07-17 01:45 pm

Haiku courtesy Michael G. Schwern

It's too fucking hot
Living in a hot, wet sponge
It's too fucking hot

Yeah it's too hot.

[identity profile] nosrialleon.livejournal.com 2003-07-17 01:50 pm (UTC)(link)
Journey - Separate Ways (in thymus)
I think you should go to the hospital for that...

[identity profile] kennfusion.livejournal.com 2003-07-17 02:23 pm (UTC)(link)
Michael shows no real emotion in the haiku. The repeating line could be seen as an attempt to solidify the feeling of heat, by showing it is so hot, that he cannot even get the energy to think of five more syllables. Personally, I think it just shows laziness of the Haiku art.

I think he should have went for:

It's too fucking hot
Living in a hot, wet sponge
God damn it's too hot

[identity profile] frobisher.livejournal.com 2003-07-17 03:16 pm (UTC)(link)
Also, there's the fact that he's now in Portland, which has rather mild weather.

Personal favorite repetitive haiku (courtesy Kevin Lenzo):

Damian Conway
Goddam, Damian Conway
Damian Conway

[identity profile] jonpants.livejournal.com 2003-07-17 03:43 pm (UTC)(link)
Who lives in a pineapple under the sea?
SpongeBob SquarePants!
Absorbent and yellow and pourous is he!
SpongeBob SquarePants!

If nautical nonsense be something you wish!
SpongeBob SquarePants!
Then drop on the deck and flop like a fish!
SpongeBob SquarePants!

[identity profile] autodidactic.livejournal.com 2003-07-17 03:43 pm (UTC)(link)
It's way fuckin' hot
I wholeheartedly concur
Like a split-pea soup.

A.

[identity profile] rpkrajewski.livejournal.com 2003-07-17 04:33 pm (UTC)(link)
Ahh, the profound delicacy of sentiment in haiku